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He Was Right: Sea Changes (Kifo Island Chronicles Volume 1) for WIPpet Wednesday

Welcome to WIPpet Wednesday, a weekly blog hop which encourages writers to move WIPs (works-in-progress) to publication by posting excerpts related to the date.We’re led by the capable fingers and nimble mind of Emily Witt

Hi there!

Well, here we are. It’s International Women’s Day, and WIPpet Wednesday, in one efficient package. Since I’ve already posted to the Beauty of a Woman Blogfest, with my poems Seeds of Wisdom; Fertile Soil and Nevertheless, We Persist. I’m going to go ahead and get down to the business of this special WIPpet – the last one from Sea Changes, and Kifo Island, at least for a while.

I’ve been reading through the TnT story (it’s more or less in bits and pieces, at the moment) I’ll start sharing from next week. I’m happy to report that revisions, thus far, don’t seem too complex, and there’s a pretty good sass factor on both sides.

But that’s next week. And this week, we’ve kept Ava waiting long enough, and it’s not like she has the time to waste. So let’s jump back into Sea Changes, from my Kifo Island series.

Ava Garcia was a constant revelation during the writing of her story. Her struggle goes beyond the issue of whether people should be allowed to choose the manner of their death. She encapsulates my personal attitudes about how children deserve to be treated. It’s an honor to share her voice with you!

The Premise:

In advocating for a dying girl seeking emancipation from controlling parents, can an overburdened young woman and a lonely young man find a future together?

Note:

This passage has been rough-edited (trust me, you don’t want to see the muddled-beyond-hope original version! I’ll be creating a more structured revision plan once the 24 scenes pass through my local crit group (proceeding very slowly, due to Other Things), and I’ve completed Holly Lisle’s How to Revise Your Novel class.

Your input is gratefully accepted, and might go a long way toward making this a better novel!

Context:

Ava’s father made a salacious accusation about her and Donovan, and she reacted impulsively. Here, the aftermath…

WIPpet Math:

  • Today is March 8, 2017

  • Three paragraphs, for the month – and because that brings us to the end of the scene, the chapter, and what I’m willing to share of this draft, at least for now.

He Was Right

He was right. Ava blinked back tears. She wanted to be mad at Donovan for being so right, or for still being so nice, even now – but she couldn’t. He was right, and that meant that she was wrong. She needed to make it better – but she didn’t know how to do that. “How could I be so stupid?” She really wanted another hug, but she was sure it would be even stupider to ask for one now.

Donovan smiled a little. “You’re twelve, Ava. Maybe it’s good you don’t think of these things. Maybe it’s not so good. But no one can expect you to be older than you are.” He stopped smiling. “But I don’t know if I can accept your case, now. At least, not if I’m the only one with you – best not to add any fuel to that fire.”

“Oh, Donovan -” Ava felt the tears starting again, and tried to hold them back. “I’ve really done it this time, haven’t I?”
 

Is Donovan right?

How will Ava’s father react?

Can Ava fix this, or is it already too late?

What happens next?

Well, as I’ve said, next week we move on…but I will be looking for beta readers for this novel by the end of the year, so, if you’d like to be one of them, drop me a line or two in that little box below!

Want more WIPpets? Click the button below, and even add your own date-related excerpt if you’re so inclined!

Posted in A Round of Words in 80 Days, A Round of Words in 80 Days 2017, Challenges and Contests, Life Writing, Parenting, Round One 2017, Unschooling

Building An Independent Adult: March 8, 2017

Hey there!

Before we get into today’s update, I’d love to chat for a couple of minutes. First, I want to salute all women everywhere, and all men who treat us as the equals we are. Whether you’re striking, or going about your normal life, or something else, I’m thinking of you, and celebrating you, today.

I’m also celebrating my son, who told me on Monday that he hasn’t thought of himself as a kid for about a year now. We were out doing errands, and the conversation included his plans for the future, what he’s learning, music he enjoys, and more. Before we left the house, he helped me rescue a sparrow who had gotten trapped on our enclosed porch, and was too frightened to see the open door.

Then, today, when one of the kitchen sink drains was clogged, he decided to explore basic plumbing.

It’s amazing, seeing him taking on adult challenges, undaunted. He’s got one foot in the adult world, and one in childhood. He’s breathtaking. =D

It doesn’t seem so long ago – but long enough for him to be a head TALLER than me now!

If you’re a parent, have you ever found yourself quite suddenly looking at one of your children in an entirely new light?

If you aren’t a parent, have you had that kind of perception shift with a character?

Do you intend to do anything to observe International Women’s Day?

Writing:

  • Foul Deeds Will Rise (Trueborn #2): Reread existing material; complete draft (10/50 scenes). Primary goal. Reread: Scene 15/40 complete and I’m sooo glad I’m taking a revision class, because this isn’t even close to a clean draft!

  • Fan Fiction (The IDIC Romance): Draft three chapters for Love and Loss, based upon the drabbles I wrote in February. Secondary goal. Shifted one scene, designated scenes for Chapter 1/3, and took notes for fleshing out the drabbles, and adding scenes and passages to draft to complete the chapter.

Plotting:

Revision:

  • The IDIC Romance: Progress with revisions for On Any Tuesday Night (was First Contact, With Jazz), as I work through lessons 2- of Holly Lisle’s Revision Course. Continue revisions for A Backdrop of Stars  1-7. Primary goal. OATN Worksheets: p 9/82 (Scene 3) in progress. 1,103 words of Chapter Two rewrite drafted.

Social Media:

  • Blogging Features: Continue biweekly Mindful Monday and Skywatch Friday posts, as well as weekly #SoCS, #8sunday, WIPpet Wednesday, and Weekend Coffee share posts. Develop rough schedule to pre-produce April posts where possible; have all drafts in website interface or Scrivener by March 31. Tertiary goal. #Mindful (#BOAW2017) complete.

Hometending:

  • Homeschool Administration: Draft, proof, and submit second quarter reports, due March 15. Create Flickr portfolios for this school year. Primary goal. Reports proofed and submitted Sunday evening – that’s right! I submitted them over a week early, thanks to being sick and not really up to much beyond administrative things late last week.

  • Resets/reorganizations: study, family room, bedroom, living room, bathroom, and kitchen. Complete three 27 thing flings each room, each week. One 27 thing fling on porch and/or yard each week. 33 General Hometending rounds weekly. Secondary goal. Family; bedroom: 1/3; Porch: 1/1; general: 10/33. A combination of busy days, then a very tired Tuesday, have slowed me down a bit more than I wanted, here.
  • Photo digitalization: Scan 27 travel photos per week. Tertiary goal. Pulled this week’s photos.

Lifetending:

  • My beloveds: One on one time with each, doing something of value to us both, each week. Primary goal. Conversation; videos; gaming; bird rescue; shopping; lunch; snuggling; television.

  • NNWM local group: Interact regularly, in person and online; participate actively in critique group. Tertiary goal. Write-in; online interaction; critique piece in progress: page 14/19.

  • Paying it Forward: Offer beta reading, reviews, and promotional posts for other writers. Side goal. Shared many of the other #BOAW posts.

Selftending:

  • Journal six mornings and four evenings each week. Meditate six mornings and three evenings weekly. Primary goal. Morning: 2/6 journal/ meditation. Evening: 0/4 journal; 0/3 meditation.

  • Get a cumulative total of at least 99 minutes moderate physical activity 5 days weekly; 111 minutes (1 hour, 51 minutes) twice weekly, and 9 hours of more strenuous activities (tai chi, swimming, hiking, cardio, weights, etc.). Secondary goal. 99 minutes: 3/5; 111 minutes: 1/2; Strenuous:0/9 hours.

Leaps of Faith:

  • Draft CV and revise. Pulled up document and reread; simmering.

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